sample 1

4/5

He copyed many sentences and anlysised very detailed. It is clear to see he quoted and anylsised many things,but it is a little bit general. Or he focused on Margaret’s emotion too much.

6/10

He wanted mix his acting with his thinking,but he did not expressed well. It seems like he wrote too much performance,but he forgot to say the meaning of each lines. On the other hand, he kept using his own vision to write, wirting many things that he exprienced by himself. However, we have to know lines meaning because we did not read before. After we know the meaning, we are able to see if this man his the same idea. Moreover,I feel his writes did not match his thesis. He talled about Margaret all the time which is not good.

4 /5

In my opinion,he did best on this part of language use. He has no grammar mistakes and build his essay organized. However he talked about too much literature anlysis.

sample 2

5/5

In general, It is a good essay. And it is long enough,so I think it must be a detailed essay.  In her performance she showed her character’s emotian well by using body language. In addition,she deeply go into each lines and catched charater’s attitude of what they think. She did a great job on relating her own performance and line’s meaning,which makes readers feel it is well organized.

8/10

Like what I said before, since she understood each line clearly, she can easily know by using which ways to show,to act. “ I decided to kneel down in this moment of despair,...drastically increasing my voice.” She has right blocking sense. And she gave enough reasons why she do those movements,on the other hand she expressed her thoughts. She thought it was challengable because the different states of mind she has to go through different stages. In this paragraph, she talked about what she learnt from this performance, she became more engaging with the character. That is good to hear a actor said this.

4/5

My first impression of this essay is words amount. There are 1999words. Her introduction covered completed telling Ophelia and why she chose to play this scene. Same with the sample one, there is no grammar mistake,but she organized essay better.