I am happy to see we finished our first draft,and we could figure out what problems we have to fix and what can improve. That was a scene three people have to have same amount of sentences to say. We tried our best to distribute same amount,but I still feel “Father” this character is less than others. So it is necessary to add more on father’s script.

Since that is our first draft,we were not able to control time perfectly. We should have about 15 minutes,but we only played around 9 minutes.

Besides these small things,the main problem is our blockings. I read feedbacks from classmates  and I found almost everyone mentioned about our blockings. They were confused. During the first scene,I forgot to turn back to audience,so for audience they could not see what happened on stage. I did not realize it is important to show to audiences but not perform alone. So next time,I will face to audiences. Another thing is sometimes we stand too far,which means not in the center on stage.

I saw a funny feedback from Marinda saying she first thought me and Jack are business partners. I have to be more angry and Jack has to not to be so creepy. His voice made him not like a man that girls love. It is just strange. Be angry is my goal,I cannot let my daughter fall in love with man who bring trouble to her. In the first draft,the relationship between me and jack is so good, we need to change that. Especially we shake hands,I think it is a good idea to delete that part because father actually does not want to. I will pat on his shoulder and say “ah,you are the man…” That is kind of like a warning to say I will beat you if you near my daughter. To my daughter, I should be like worry about her. People said I was too calm when I know they are dating. So I thought over and came out a process. From shocked to angry and then worry. That is realistic reaction.

From personal aspect, I feel the time between this couples are not enough, maybe I should give their more time to look like they are dating.

Anyway I think we have a good start. Just be louder,more emotional next time!